Saturday, August 30, 2008

Chapter 19: Perfection

Meeting number 2 up! No room for the good old amnesia bombs this time...

Chapter 19 in Fictionpress and Soompi

I'm happy to have completed the 'emo' part of the stories (well, nearly complete - there's still Sessions Part 4).

As much as possible, in this chapter, I'd like to emphasize the overwhelming emotions of guilt, hatred, helplessness, frailty, and imperfection of Yoshida Ayane. This is part of the contrast between F&L 1 and 2. This is sort of like an ascend to how things have gotten complicated, then later as we go on, we'll fix these things little by little by revelations left and right. I think that writing the chapter in first person really made it work, although I am still having a hard time doing so. I did not want her to sound whiny or 'incessantly miserable'. I wanted Ayane to tell her thoughts in such a way that she sounds 'tough', yet once you read between the lines, you'll actually see that she's very much shattered inside.

Now, time to lighten things up a bit for chapter 21-30. I have bad news for Crosse fans though... I don't think he'll be coming out in 21-30 yet.

-hiro

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